04-12-2020, 10:16 AM
This really is a very creative and well written story. You've captured a lot of the thoughts that go on before, during and around this fetish and its lure and lore and attracction/detraction. I like it but it's also sort of disturbing as this fetish is at times a lot of times! At the same time as I share a lot of these thoughts, it does not quite hit its target for me. I'm not sure why but I'm guessing its because of the actual targets in the story: mentioned are chests, hearts, back; none of it is my fetish calling and none of it hits home sexually as does some of the stuff you recount before the actual deaths: the desire to not be killed vs the desire to refute the fear, the hardness at it all despite knowing it is horrible, and the excitement one gets to ward off the fear. At the same time, there's nothing that turns me on in this story as per the actual hits: there are old men, there are NO navel hits, and it is far too real for me. I also don't like armour in my fantasy or usually don't anyway. I like this but I don't fetish love it and I hope ttha'ts okay to say. For me, it's more an anti fetish or anti war story and that's no bad thing! You really write well!